Broken Wings

Thank you XD

Maybe....

The orphanage isn't supposed to be explained more. Besides, it's just an orphanage like all the others. It would be boring to explain it. And besides, I'm not too familiar ...

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After thirteen years of living there, she would know that you can't hear anything through stone, unless it is really, really, REALLY loud. I think this whole passage is pointless. ...

Haha, that was great! I loved the whole thing, it drew me in right from the start! Nothing wrong with it; I like the whole diary thing. I've never done ...

Yes, she is being sarcastic. Thank you, this was actually one of the few short stories that I am proud of. It's just one of those things that you just ...

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How is this for a better prologue? I hope it pleases you a little more Myth! :wink: ~~~~ _____ I crouched low to the stone floor. At the moment it ...

O_O You stole my name! But besides that, this was a pretty good piece. Some typoes that I would consider going through and finding. I can't critique too much with ...

This is a piece of chapter one that I'm still working. I wrote it up really quickly, but critique to death if you want. No really, please do. ~~~~ Chapter ...

Thank you, Myth. :wink: I always look forward to your comments. Seriously, I do. They help very much. :D

Nice job. Although I cant exactly tell what this is about or where its going (leaves me to think, I have a thought but due to the area of the ...

Thank you ^-^ Not much now... >.> I'm still working on it. I'll add more soon, though, so check back!

First Chapter done! =D